Date: 11/21/2009 - 03:32 pm Title: Chapter 3
great strory, i like it, i would like to read more, this is a real depressing end, so please, please, please write more
Date: 02/28/2009 - 10:33 am Title: Chapter 3
You really want me to smack you, don't you??
What could you abandon this story??
Please don't leave things like that!! Please!! Please!! Please!!( I can go on like this forever, just so you know)
So, Please finish this!!
Date: 02/14/2009 - 08:45 am Title: Chapter 1
How come you didn't continue this story??
It was the first 'verse I have ever read and I love it so much.
Please up date.
Don't live the story unfinished.
It will be a shame to end thing like that:(
Date: 11/12/2008 - 08:15 pm Title: Chapter 3
Ok, first off, WOW! I inspired you to write more of this? Really? Yay me, lol.
That first part of this, from Jensen's POV was just so painfully beautiful. It was like I could physically see Jensen's pain and insecurities. Every word literally took my breath away.
Him thinking that everything he touched turned to poison and how could he not taint the lives of the children he'd be teaching? *gasps* God, you really encompassed Jensen in this chapter, how he didn't want to be doing it but he would, for Jared, and for the life that he and they wanted to have.
The part about his mother dying in the class Jared taught in was heartbreaking and a great insight into that dark part of his life, the time when everything started, the day he lost his dad and his childhood.
And when Jensen was trying to draw Jared, and how he never thought he could do is beauty justice? Wow, so heartbreakingly breathtaking. Just the way that he sees Jared, even after all those years.
And then Jared's POV, when he realised how unhappy Jensen was with the decision he'd made, how he felt that he'd pushed him into it but knew there was no way back now and how terrified that it would all lead to him losing Jensen.
I love the little details you put in about how, after sixteen years they're both still so amazed to have each other, how their partner could ever even want them.
I'm interesting about the thing with Josh, I hope you elaborate on that at some point, cause it feels like a pivotal progression of Jensen's life.
I'm so glad you continued this, and I really hope you carry on writing it. But I have to say that this chapter, especially the first part, is the best thing I've read of your so far, it was like you put your whole heart into it and became a part of the story.
Beautiful. Thank you. :)
Author's Response: I... Wow. Thank you for saying all those things! I'm so glad that you liked this chapter so much. As for Josh, yes; that will be explored more. Clearly, this chapter was just chock-full of foreshadowing, and I'm glad that didn't ruin it, or make it seem like filler. That would make me sad. I promise to continue writing it, as again, Magos will have me shot if I don't. But still. I'm so glad you realize what an effort this is, and appreciate it. I'm so happy that you like it, and I hope I don't let you down.
Date: 11/12/2008 - 06:10 pm Title: Chapter 3
you know the only reason i haven't shot you is due to your clever distraction with QAF. But since that's almost done, you will have nothing left to distract me with. mwahahahaha!
but as for the story: :-( i hate when jen cries. always makes me wanna. but i liked the whole sweats being a jared hug thing. very cute. and poor jared. he was just trying to help. how was he supposed to know jen would be like this? I look forward to seeing jensen in action as the pe teacher. excellent job and i'm sure the next one will be just as good.
p.s. i'll be done with QAF tonight. Just a friendly little hint. ;-D
Author's Response: Oh, no! You've seen through my evil plan! Whatever will I do next?!? Perhaps work on my fics, lol.
Aw! No criesies! That makes me criesies! I'm glad you like the hug thing, I like the imagery, you know? XD I am such a dorkus... I'm looking foreword to writing him as a PE teacher, it amuses me. And I know Jay was just trying to help, but as this fic continues... Well, you'll understand Jen's hesitation a little better, he isn't being an ass for asses sake, promise. Thank you for the props, and I hope I live to your expectations, doll.
p.s. I'm screwed, lol! ;D
Date: 11/12/2008 - 03:01 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh, Jensen so doesn't want this, but he's doing it for Jared and that's really sweet but it's just going to cause problems in the long run, it's gonna make him miserable.
I love how Jared's so dreamy, making all these plans for the perfect life and Jensen just doesn't have the heart to burst him bubble, plus he wants it too, I'm sure.
*sigh* It's gonna be a tough road, I can see.
Really looking forward to more of this, but how will I know what you update it??
Author's Response: lol, I love how into this story you're getting! And if you're reading this, send me a friend thing on myspace or a message and I will send you notices when I update! Sound good? Cool! 'Cause I love your reviews! loves them!
Date: 11/12/2008 - 01:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hey, back again, lol.
Ok, first question: why does Erica call them Uncle Gram'pa??
I love that they've been trying to start a family, it was one of Jared's dreams right from the very start.
I can't wait to see when Jensen got Jared as a gift.
They're so in love, it's adorable, but I get the feeling you're going to be messing with things, evil writer, lol.
Can't wait to see where this part of the story goes. :D
Author's Response: Because it's adorable? lol. Kenze calls Jen dad when she's feeling goofy, and Jen's technically Erica's uncle... It was just cute and I had to, lol. And of course I'm going to mess with things, it's fun. I'm an Angst!Whore, never forget it, lol. I'm glad you like it! Thanks for another awesome review!
Date: 10/29/2008 - 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 2
Awwweee! He aced the interview! Lol. And Jared's all - Bring in the kiddies! Lol! Bring on the Angst I say! The good thing about this instant update thing Rachel instituted while she's busy is that we don't have to wait! Loving this fic and can't wait for the angst to REALLY get underway. So like - get cracking Blaze!
Date: 10/28/2008 - 10:58 pm Title: Chapter 2
Lol! I have to admit i love this chapter and how jared is incapable of cooking only three things at the same time. haha! excellent job so far. definately looking forward to more.
Author's Response: I'm really *really* glad you like it so far, and am glad you like dunce!Jared. Thanks for the review, Magos!
Date: 10/22/2008 - 05:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooooh, I can't wait for more. I just love fics where the boys are all domesticated and doing the family thinglol! I dunno, must be a quirk. And I'm waiting to see them face the kiddy thing especially. And I agree with Chiazu - married life ain't a walk in the park and with the pressures involved...there could be major angst involved (that will only make em stronger and make for great reading too lol!) And yeah - Uncle Grampa IS cute lolol!
Just the little warning about Violence has me wondering...:(
Anyway - loved the original and no doubt will love the sequel...won't love the waiting for more...but then genius can't be rushed :P Laterz!
Author's Response: lol! I'm glad you liked it. And OF COURSE I'm going to throw angst in! I'm an angst whore! lol Of course, I'm also a PadAckles whore, so yeah. There will probably be more up tonight or very early tomorrow morning. The waits shouldn't be too long between updates, but thanks for calling me/my work genius! I feel so special now!